| Gemi's Critique |
Yay~! Cloud in his KH-form,
a fan-girl couldn't ask for any more! A great version of
the official artwork with lots of careful attention to detail
throughout :) |
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Now onto the comments, I think the points
that need to be covered are the anatomy, lineart and colouring.
His body in the majority appears to be well balanced. The
only major issue I have is with the placement of his eyes.
The right eye is skewed downwards which makes his face look
very unbalanced. It is important to remember that the eyes
are placed at the same height. You can check for this by
drawing straight lines that divide the face into sections.
The base of the eyes should follow the bold red line. Also
the size of the right eye would be smaller in order to show
that it is further away from the viewer. The white of the
right eye would also not be visible from this angle. |
The next thing that I'll
cover is the lineart and colouring. The lineart is very
clean and bold, but could be improved by working on making
it smoother and by varying the widths. I've added an example
of this using a picture of Cloud I've drawn recently. |
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You can see that I've make the lines where there will shadows
cast darker and thicker and finer lines for detailing. Tapering
the lines is also important especially in places such as the
tips of the hair. This helps to give a greater sense of dimension
to the drawing.
The colouring is very good with nice choices of colours
for shading. Though the colouring could have been made less
sketchy in his cloak and the colouring of his hair is very
bold and smooth but could have done with shading. |
| I hope that
some of these suggestions help and I wish you the best of
luck with your future work ^__^ |
